Geschichte < Korrekturlesen < Englisch < Sprachen < Vorhilfe
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| Aufgabe | | It is a story from two girls.In the evening would two girls walking in her lunchbreak. They had talking about her new boyfriends but than they see a thing on a ground. It was shining in the gras. They going to this and put them up. It was a phone and it was on. The one woman lokked at the phone and in this moment comes a mail. They will know and read the message. It was a message from a man they had written that he will überfallen? a bank. The girls was shocked and think about what they want to do. But after a time she goes to the police and show them the message. They would find this man from the message but the others in his group not. The police goes to the bank and versteckt sich um die anderen zu schnappen??? The girls have been a present for this. Te girls were happy and they will looked in the future often on the ground. |
Hallo ich bin es mal wieder Luisa ich habe hier eine geschichte zu einem bild verfasst wir dollten uns eine geschichte zu diesem bild ausdenken und diese mit 15o wörtern schreiben aber ich glaube ich habe viele zeit und grammatik fehler wenn mir jemand bitte helfen könnte den die ist meine erste selbst geschriebene geschichte und ich weiß das dort bestimmt viel falsch ist. Ich wäre euch so dankbar. Vielen dank luisa
ich hoffe ihr versteht den sinn meiner geschichte
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Hallo Lisa,
du hast eine schöne Geschichte mit guten Ideen geschrieben  !
Ich habe sie mal korrigiert und ein paar Dinge geändert, damit die Geschichte etwas flüssiger wird. Du müsstest schauen ob die Wortzahl für dich in Ordnung ist, da es etwas mehr als 150 sind (~170). Dafür das es deine erste Geschichte war, war sie schon ziemlich gut !
This is a story of two girls. In the evening two girls took a walk (=gingen spazieren) during their break. They had talked about their new boyfriends when they suddenly saw something (lying) on the ground. It was shining in the grass. They went towards the object (=Gegenstand) and took it up. It was a phone and it was switched on. One of the women looked at the phone and noticed an incoming message (=bemerkte eine eingehende Nachricht). They were curious (=neugierig) and read it. The message was from a man who had written that he wanted to rob (=ausrauben) a bank. The girls were shocked and thought about what to do. After a certain time (=nach einer gewissen Zeit) they decided (=entschieden) to go to the police and show them the message. The police said that they would find the addressor (=Absender) but not his accomplices (=Komplizen). So they went to the bank, hid there and finally caught the robbers (=versteckten sich dort und fingen zu guter Letzt die Raüber). The girls received (=bekamen) presents for their courage (=Mut). They were happy and (surely=sicherlich) they will often look down on the ground in the future.
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