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| Aufgabe | | The Article “ Flippers yearn to be free” is about 5 orcas and there performing at Sea Worlds parks. It goes that these are violently seized from the ocean and taken from their families as babies. In this article give some many experts their arguments about the orcas who lived in slavery. An animal rights group has sued Sea World because they accusing the chain aquatic theme of violating the rights of orcas. Because they want sued the parks with the 13th amendment, which they want to extend this rule that it goes to marine mammals too, of the Us constitution, which abolished slavery. Sea World answer back that they educated the public about the creatures. David Steinberg a professor at Thomas Jefferson school of law menas that Peta abase the people who were owned as slaves. The lawsuit seeks a court order requiring Sea World to release the five killer whales to a “suitable habitat”. Peta has do in past a lots of controversial actions in seeking to advance animal rights. |
Hallo ich bin es mal wieder luisa ich bräuchte dringend eure Hilfe ich muss morgen ein Referat halten und muss zustzlich ein Handout abgeben den Text oben habe ich aus dem Artikel selbst verfasst und wollte nur wissen ob ich dies so übernehmen kann oder ihr etwas zu verbessern wüsstet weil sonst bekomme ich großen noten abzug wenn viele grammatik fehler im handout sind wäre sehr lieb von euch und vielen dank im vorraus:)))
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 23:14 Mi 30.11.2011 | | Autor: | moody |
> weil sonst bekomme ich großen noten abzug wenn
> viele grammatik fehler im handout sind wäre sehr lieb von
> euch und vielen dank im vorraus:)))
Dann hoffe ich mal dass du das hier noch rechtzeitig liest 
> The Article “ Flippers yearn to be free” is about 5
> orcas and there performing at Sea Worlds parks. It goes
critizes statt goes
> that these are violently seized from the ocean and taken
würde statt these einfach nochmal the orcas wiederholen
statt seize vll. capture
> from their families as babies. In this article give some
> many experts their arguments about the orcas who lived in
In this article many experts explain their arguments about the orcas who live in slavery
statt slavery aber eher captivity, die werden ja nicht wirklich versklavt sondern "nur" in Gefangenschaft gehalten
> slavery. An animal rights group has sued Sea World because
> they accusing the chain aquatic theme of violating the
they accuse (nicht ing)
chain aquatic theme soll was bedeuten? Sonst schreib einfach nochmal Sea World
> rights of orcas. Because they want sued the parks with the
> 13th amendment, which they want to extend this rule that it
> goes to marine mammals too, of the Us constitution, which
> abolished slavery. Sea World answer back that they
:S Das hier würde ich nochmal komplett neu schreiben.
The animal rights group wants to sue Sea Wolrd (nicht die Parks an sich, sondern das Unternehmen denke ich mal ) relying on the [mm] 13^{th} [/mm] amendment, which they would like to extend for marine mammals, too.
The [mm] 13^{th} [/mm] amendment abolishes slavery.
> educated the public about the creatures. David Steinberg a
Sea World replied they would teach the people about the animals.
nach Steinberg fehlt ein Komma
> professor at Thomas Jefferson school of law menas that
und hier ein the nach dem at
statt means vielleicht thinks oder states
> Peta abase the people who were owned as slaves.
... thinks that PETA's comparison to slavery wrongs the people that lived as slaves.
>The lawsuit
> seeks a court order requiring Sea World to release the five
files for statt seeks
> killer whales to a “suitable habitat”. Peta has do in
Warum jetzt den Ausdruck killer whale statt orca?
Und warum die Anführungszeichen
ich glaube es müsste in a statt to a heißen
> past a lots of controversial actions in seeking to advance
> animal rights.
The actions PETA took in the past to protect the rights animals are seen as controversial.
lg moody
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